THere is definately another story hidden under this one. Whatever event that occured that made you write this piece the way you did, I am sorry but at the same time very pleased. Please don't think me cruel...I just think a person writes better when he or she can relate their own experiences to their sotrylines. It is almost as if we are learning about that specific individual in a new light. I shed tears. Bravo!!!
In some way, I feel wrong to review because it's such a personal piece it seems almost as if I'm actually reviewing you. So I'll just focus on the writing. The vocabulary and structure is good. And the language is very emotive. Well done
