potent!
WISE, what a powerful story, I found little to fault with it, only one thing, likely a typo, but (!?) watch those multiple punctuations as they are an evil grammatical trap. XD
Otherwise, it was flawless. The characterisation was fabulous, as was the imagery and pathos, the over-all affect intense and had me hooked from the start -- hallmarks of a good writer.
I loved the way you swung the pendulum between Beryl and Usagi, the princess and how different forms of power bring different advantages, yet present unexpected vulnerabilities -- love and death praxis -- but which course is true, which strength would vanquish the evil queen? It was all here. fabulous one-shot! *hands you a silver rose and bows* L. |