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Rated: R
Status: Incomplete
Serena is going through pain as her father abuses her. She hasn't had great child hood from always being picked on. Will Darien and the Scouts be able to help her?
Number of Chapters: 14 Total Size: 139k Word Count: 25,257
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| | | | ummmm. Andrew's reaction? Hilarious.
I mean who wouldn't react that way?
First you hear that Serena's mugged, Darien saves her and then...
"you were stabbed?!!!"
hahahaha.
Darien says it so nonchalantly. "then i was stabbed. no biggy!" its so funny.
very cute story. can't wait for updates!!! |
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| | | | Okay confession time. I'm hooked!
Even though this is a painful and heartwrenching story [something I must commend you on, you write this beautifully], I always look forward to new chapters :D
A wonderful story so far, I thought her mother's reaction was well written, and while some may see the hooking up of D&S a little rushed, I think you pulled it off. Heck, they did in the anime after all :D
Can't wait for more! |
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 |  |  |  |  | | Loki - Thursday October 09, 2008 at 12:35 | |
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| | | | This is a tragic story, and while it was written a long while back, I can see the pain and suffering of Serena and yet, I empathize with her plight.
She and the characters are also sad and tragic, and though OOC in many ways, the story is sadly one that does strike a chord of truth amidst the more balanced lives most of us enjoy.
I would say, though I have only read the prologue thus far, if you've not gotten yourself a BETA editor, please consider posting in the Writer's network for one. If you have and you've not had them review your story from the start, please give that soem thought as well.
I can only encourage you to read widely and working with a BETA will hone your writing skill and foster your talent as a story teller. Good luck! ^_^ |
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| | | | | | Ashlee - Friday December 30, 2005 at 06:14 | |
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