Arias Ink - Information about Amethyst-Heart

Epistulae Desiderantis (Harry Potter)
Reviewed by Loki - Saturday November 07, 2009 at 11:44

Ames, you've proven beyond doubt that you are capable of anything. At a time when a good story brings us readers to read and enjoy those gems on offer from our writing pool, something like this emerges and reminds us that we have plenty of talent here on AI, and those of us who write, as well as read are blessed by people like you who move into new territory and this ficlet is a wonderful example.

I thought the letter form was perfectly natural, and expressed the perfect array of feeling, the anxiety of a woman worrying for her true love, her husband and friend. Penelope, and her persona is the perfect muse for this excellent Harry Potter story, James and Lilly, pairing, the way you use language is beautiful, the characters breathe through your hand, the images come alive and we are right there, feeling the pain and the relief and the uncertanty. Baby Harry is so cute too!

You did great, and keep going with your writing, it is always uplifting to see inkers that have been around a while come out with a new gem, and all of us are the luckier for this... thanks girl! <3

Something Real
Reviewed by Yumecosmos - Thursday April 17, 2008 at 04:12

What a sweet story! The prologue was one of the cutest scenes I've ever read! Mamoru is truly endearing, and his banter with Usagi made me smile every time. I like how you're developing their relationship. Seeing things from Mamoru's point of view adds a new dimension to things and makes it easy to understand why he teases her. Hope you'll write more!

Something Real
Reviewed by lexie_06 - Tuesday January 01, 2008 at 01:05

hope you get to finish this story i would like to finish reading it, you've left me at the edge of my seat wanting to know what happens next.

Embracing the Rain
Reviewed by Skysong - Wednesday April 04, 2007 at 08:49

well... i thought emotionally it was really good, and that's mostly what i was looking for. It smoothly brought the emotions to higher and higher intensities without beoing overpowering or coming on too strong.

but... i really wanted to see how the emotions compared to the lyrics, and if i could really tie specifics in the lyrics that you couldn't repeat exactly but still came very clear across in the story. Since the lyrics weren't copied in the author's notes i couldn't really see that comparison, and i think that was a huge basis of the challenge.

so, i'd appreciate it if you could add the song lyrics. I think it would add a lot to the reading experience. Some of us are too lazy to look them up ourselves, especially if we don't know the lyrics very well.

but i still think it was a really good job, and something to be proud of.

Solace
Reviewed by Loki - Sunday September 10, 2006 at 03:51

A Rosetta Stone of the most profound

WISE: Amethyst, reading this short piece confirms all I knew was true of your writing -- superb, potent, imaginative and one can see the effort, love and dedication you wove into this deep and powerful gift to us all. I salute you and am honored to have read this!

Your work is a shining star to all aspiring writers on this site and beyond!

*hands you a garland of amethyst roses and a moon wand* L. =^_^=

Ethereal Beauty
Reviewed by RENA630 - Sunday July 23, 2006 at 01:01

I know you have so many other things going on in your life rigth now but I really want you to continue this! Yes...I know! It's sad that I'm JUST NOW reading this but you know I am a bit slow at times...Anyway...back to the point! Find your muse (and mine if you can...lol) and please continue this...the prologue was captivating!

Something Real
Reviewed by RENA630 - Friday July 07, 2006 at 03:58

Awwww I loved it! I particularly liked how you took occurences in the original manga (the whole bumping into eachother adn the nickname etc...) and gave it a new insight. I also loved your vocabulary, I felt as if I was actually Mamoru. Nicely Done! I hope you update soon!

Something Real
Reviewed by cel1999 - Monday July 03, 2006 at 07:32

LOL. I think this is going to be a fun story - fullt of wit and qiups, with a good pace. I was laughing by the end of your first chapter. Some of it seems v. normal standard SM story, and yet you can bring that life to the characters that is absolutely essential if anyone is to write a story like this and get away with it; particularly as lots of people try and fail - you aren't one of these. This one is starting out great and I look forward to seeing your other chapters.

Something Real
Reviewed by Bakayaro - Monday July 03, 2006 at 01:50

I really enjoyed reading this. I think there were some gramatical errors (or maybe I don't know the words), but other than that I didn't notice anything. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Take your time, but try not to take too long!

Something Real
Reviewed by Loki - Saturday July 01, 2006 at 15:50

What an amazing chapter -- enchants and engages the reader

WISE: A few things you might like to tweak ^_^

1: This phrase� countless of times� should be countless times

2: �nodded a bit � a bit should be removed.

3: closed my eyes for a bit replaced with something like: a second or two

4:�everyone was in, and I�leave out underlined text, too much show and not tell

5:�letting any thought whatsoever come to mind...a problem with this, awkward, perhaps removing whatsoever and changing letting to allowing

6:�I fell in love of with her� this is a typo, but thought I would bring it up ^_^

7: �recall any aspect of her name� better as: recall her name

8:�plays in my mind each night and every morning� I felt this sentence awkward, perhaps: plays in my mind morning and night -- these are minor grammar, structure and word usage flaws, not fatal, but watch out for these and check your prologue for similar issues.

Highlights

I love your visualisation, the dance scene and how Mamoru draws himself away from Hanna on the dance floor. Mamoru,the haunted young man, looking for a dream girl. I love the plot, it is intriguing.

Your vocabulary is fantastic. The story flows nicely. Good pace and I loved how you introduced Usagi and brought her & Mamoru together with a *Umph* two collisions and one _stalk_ later... LOL I adored it, an your humour.

Dialogue great, good style and you drew me in and I loved how you animated Usagi and her reaction to Manoru, I could see the steam coming out of her ears ^__^ I love this story, so love and polish and...more please! *hands you an amethyst bloom and bows* L.=^_^=