2013-04-22 11:34 In the name of Glamour & Glitter, Fashion & Fame…- Amy Mebberson http://t.co/icF4yx6qZW @amymebberson

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Holy crap. My teeth hurt, it was so sweet. ^_~ lovely story. The way you portrayed Darien was a very nice change. Keep up the excellent work!

kawaii!!

Loved it! Congrats on an awesome story!

Well, I must say that I completely disagree. I think the story was wonderfully original. Truly a breath of fresh air! I liked how you made Darien out to be the ugly ducking rather than how the norm make Serena that way. I also felt that it was very well written and didn't find any distracting errors. So, out of 5 stars I would definately give it 10!! Great job! Don't listen to them! Thank you for sharing!

Like probably everyone else I think the story absolutely shouldn't have been rated NC-17 there was unfourtunately nothing in it to warrant it. Sure the idea behind it was unique & original, but there were way too many gramatical & spelling mistakes for me to fully enjoy the story. I wouldn't neccessarily give it 5 stars.

I loved this story!! I thought that it was so cute and it reminded me of the blue lagoon!!!

OMG!
wow is all i can say!
That was again an amazing story...have you thought about writting a book?
I'd buy it and make my friends' buy it too lol!!

oh wow that was soo cute!
i wish i found someone like that!
maybe il go on a cruise next year! lol ;)

Such a cute, and well written story. Now if only this would happen to me!!

This was so cute!
I loved the originality of it especially, it was like Peter Parker and Mary Jane in anime form. So cute!

This was a wonderfully cute story. I also really appreciated how tastefully it was done!

This story is the perfect hollywood movie. Sweet full of passion this story will leave think aww how cute.. Don't even think about not reading Paradise

This is the first story that I have read on this site, and I just simply love it. You wrote it less then 10 chapters, and it was really well written. I like how you had Darien as not just Mr. Perfect like you would see in most stories, but kind of like a klutz. I cant wait to read more stories that you wrote. Keep up the good work.

Interesting twist on a often times too played out scenario.

this story is always a fun one to read.

Just re-read this! Loved it just as much as the first time I read it! :D

Many times I have read this, and I'm sure I have left comments on more than one occation. I love this story, it is a true story of romance. Just reading it makes me feel better. I get a sense of peace and love. Thank you.

that was a really good story .

Really good. Loved it.

that was extreamly good i can't wait to start reading the second one :)

Aria, that was an amazing work of art! I'm desperate to get ahold of a copy of Playing The Game also. Keep writing!

i really loved this story. ou can feel the love between those two from the start

wow this story is so amazing i like it

have read this story many times and i can't tell you how much i love this story....keep up the good work Aria

wowwwww!!! i really enjoyed this story, it got my heart thumping...lolz.. YOU DID A ABSOLUTLY great job on this story!!! keep up the good work =]

This was an astoundingly cute story! I loved every thing about the plot. You made a overly done plot line unique and that was great. It's amazing because I would have never pictured Darien as a geek...EVER...but in this story I could. You get major points for that. I also love how you weaved in the love scene...very classy. It didn't interfere with the plot or the message you were trying to get through...in fact I think it added to it. The way you mixed virgin innocence with carnal passion is amazing and the emotions felt very real. I also admired the way you portrayed the emotions and surroundings...it's as if I were actually there (teehee I wish)! Unlike most writers who just stick in a sex scene to draw readers you did it to emphasize their feelings towards each other and to answer Serena's question "How do you know?" you ended the love scene very modestly and I love it because it leaves to the imagination… (Although I thought the sentence "And the sounds of love echoed into the night.” Was a bit corny the fact that everything before that was nicely done made it acceptable.)

Now I did however have a problem with Serena’s character. Don’t get me wrong I could relate to her in many aspects but I couldn’t get a definite hold on her personality. She seemed very down to earth, sweet, and innocent but she doesn’t seem as glamorous and idealistic as many of the characters described her to be. For example: “She in turn left behind the polished Serena and instead went for a more natural look now.” She honestly didn’t seem that polished in the first place which made it a problem for me to see what the other characters saw. “He was her friend and she wasn’t going to dump him just because he wasn’t good for her image. She’d never dump any of her friends.” See she seemed very down to earth and not at all posh or stuck up…what I’m trying to say is that you wanted to try to make her seem a bit too into herself and her image but I don’t think it really worked. Therefore the little clues you sprinkled to try and make the illusion that she was stuck up just steered me in the wrong direction at times. Also your sentence structures were a bit simplistic which is nice don’t get me wrong. I hate to read stories that have huge vocabulary words used as constantly as the word “I” or “a”…it takes away from the story. Your structure did become too simplistic at times but that wasn’t what bothered me. What bothered me is that you seem to weave in some informal speech into your sentences and they sometimes sound as if they rather be said out loud (dialogue) then read. For example: “And let’s just say the thought of shopping was much more appealing than balancing equations.” That sounds a bit too casual to me….something that Serena might say. Plus the “Lets just say” implies to me that the reader (you) is actually stating and opinion rather than one of the characters. It just sounds unprofessional you know? Oh and some things were unrealistic too me like the fact that Malachite and Serena shared a room…I highly doubt that would happen especially on a high school field trip. Also the fact that they got tipsy is a bit unrealistic to me. If the part was chaperoned then I am certain there would have been a limit to how much wine they could drink.
Other than that I can’t complain about the story. I really liked the plot. It was a very sweet, very romantic story that was very refreshing to read. I hope I didn’t knit pick too much I just pointed out some of the things I noticed while I was reading. Oh and I understand this was probably written a while ago…yes I am a late bloomer….and I understand you have improved since then (Your published for god’s sake!)…I just thought I’d review anyway! WISE!

Wow that was great. I really enjoyed it. I loved the nerdy Darien he was so cute.

This story is just so cute...! And I would def. date any dork that looked like Darien...I even like glasses. ;0)Good job Aria :0)

I would love to be stranded on some island with someone i care about alot and not have to worry about n e thing in the worlld. Your story is great.

Yeah, it was alright. A good plot, but it wasn't the best. Good sex scene but not the hottest. All in all it was a good story

WOW. Kawaii!

oh my god! this is about one of the best stories that i've read since i first subscribe, which wasn't too long ago. it has all the feelings that you would associate with darien and serena. without all the name calling of course. all i can say is i love it and hope to find more like it. I especially like how you get straight to the feeling of attraction and skip all the drama.

awwww so cute!!

My heart is still thumping! What a sexy, romantic story. *sighs* Why can't I be stuck on an island, with the man of my dreams? *sighs again*
This story was inspirational, heart-renching, and sweet!
Keep writing Aria...
cause who knows what adventure, or timeless romance you will challenge our minds to next.
^_~

A Fan..
SweatDreamer

I LOVE IT!!! I'm SUCH a romanticist and you put the words so well! It's a dream come true!

My heart is still thumping! What a sexy, romantic story. *sighs* Why can't I be stuck on an island, with the man of my dreams? *sighs again*
This story was inspirational, heart-renching, and sweet!
Keep writing Aria...
cause who knows what adventure, or timeless romance you will challenge our minds to next.
^_~

A Fan..
SweatDreamer

hehe ... I'm new here and this is the first story I read. Its pretty good ^^. Your a good writer.

I enjoyed this story, although I found it a tad bit too short. I wanted more, but all in all I LOVED IT!

Finally! I've been waiting for this type of fic for a while. I always wondered wat a story would be like where either Darien or Serena weren't popular and they got together. I thought of writing one myself but I'm not a very good writer.-_-' I really enjoyed this story, it was well written, funny, and touching. I especially liked the part where Serena's hiding from Darien and looks like an ostrich with her head in the sand.^_^ Please write more soon because your a great author!

Hi,it was so sweet. I couldn't believe mally did that to her. I really was a very cute story.

This was a very cut story. Very well written.

Okay we have come to the conclusion that everything you write is very good. Well..extremely good. So from now on we figure we could just save ourselves the trouble of writing a whole lot of reviews for you stories and just say everything you write is great and keeps us interested the whole way through.
Jo-Jo & Airyotal

i loved this story..its so sweet!

I really liked it. You're a great writer. Congratulations

Awwww.....the ending was soo cute!! Already in paradise!! *sighs dreamily* How wonderful...! *starts drooling all over desk* *smiles broadly* Wonderful story!! You're the best Aria!! Keep it up!! Until then....ja ne!

MasacoMamoru ^.~

very nice story... i dont kno wa else to say...

Hotaru~chan

I kinda don't beleive that that story was suposed to be rated NC-17 because i've seen story's rated that and be more...um...hentaiish. On sailormoon romance but anyway, even if it wasn't rated NC-17 it really was a great story.


Tis is from SailorVbabe2002@aol.com thanx. V

I kinda don't beleive that that story was suposed to be rated NC-17 because i've seen story's rated that and be more...um...hentaiish. On sailormoon romance but anyway, even if it wasn't rated NC-17 it really was a great story.

I kinda don't beleive that that story was suposed to be rated NC-17 because i've seen story's rated that and be more...um...hentaiish. On sailormoon romance but anyway, even if it wasn't rated NC-17 it really was a great story.

I kinda don't beleive that that story was suposed to be rated NC-17 because i've seen story's rated that and be more...um...hentaiish. On sailormoon romance but anyway, even if it wasn't rated NC-17 it really was a great story.

This story is absolutely adorable and funny! Great turn out, lots of fun. Keep it up!

I love your stories. There really good. YOUR VERY GOOD.Keep up the good work!

Aww this is such a cute story!!! I love the ending!!

It's a beautiful story. Sweet, just the thing you want to sit still and read.

*grins* That was great! The ending really cute too.

This story was so cute fun and romantic I just LOVED it!! well g2g bye now!!
Love,
Serena

this story was really good. it was so CUTE! i loved the story line. imma go read Paradise v2.0 now. ^_^ i noe it'll be even better cuz u got talent like no other.
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SaiLoR GeMiNi
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this is the second story i've read written by you (of course) and I am really impressed! You have a natural
talent in writing. I hope you'll continue writing stuff thus making a lot of people happy.
Anywayz, Paradise is one fanfic to be cherished. Romantic, exciting name it all. It's a really superb story!

you have a great imagination Aria. Don't ever stop writing. This story was great.

Not everyone gets to be stranded on an island with the one guy their meant for, but everyone can dream that its possible. Aria you have captured that very dream here in this tale. Don't ever stop writing our dreams!