2013-04-22 11:34 In the name of Glamour & Glitter, Fashion & Fameā€¦- Amy Mebberson http://t.co/icF4yx6qZW @amymebberson

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I loved it. I can't say how nice it is that you are writing the story from his POV. It definitely gives a new outlook on the entire situation form the show.

wow i dont know what to say only that its deep and i love it!

I liked this a lot. Short and sweet (in a dark chocolately type of way). The take one his feelings and actions towards Usagi was great, and different, even though it's apparent in the show. No one really points it out in such a way. Unique.

That was great! I actually liked it, and normally I don't like the kind like this! Great job!

that was soooooooo cool! hope u can write some longer ones! ja ne.

WOW!i love it! very different! but in a good way!

This was awesome. I enjoyed reading it. If I ever had to describe what Mamoru was feeling, this would be it. I loved how you desbribed the pain he felt and how angered he was that he couldn't show his love for her.

Awesome submisson to the challenge, although I did find some grammatical mistakes but they're really tiny you can barely notice them.

In this sentence, 'She had given her heart freely to him, no money, no diamonds, not even (is) own heart was paraded in front of her.' I think you meant 'his' and in this sentence 'He needed to work for a (women) like Usagi, but he didn't.' Here you made the mistake of making it plural. I think it should be 'a woman'.

In the last paragraph, 'He was shaking now because he had done it again; he was going to consume her (one) more.' Here you spelled 'one' when I think you meant 'once'. 'The intense light was radiating though and she chose to leave it all(;) just to be consumed by darkness.' Here, I don't think you need a semicolon since you only use those when you're connecting two sentences together and don't have the words and, but, though, and or.

Besides these small mistakes, I found this fic really enjoyable. I could feel Mamoru's loneliness and pain and the imagery you had was great. Awesome job! Keep it up.

Woah, that was intruiging and dark. I liked it. You described Mamoru's situation and agony very well. The way you worded the story make it seem stronger and the conclusion was a good fit. I really liked it!