Runner Up: Most Recommended Story - November 2005
Season: Alternate Universe
Main Characters: Mamoru/Darien, Usagi/Serena
Genre: Adventure, Fantasy, Humour, Romance
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Number of Chapters: 11 Total Size: 233k Word Count: 40,971
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|Anonymous - Wednesday August 08, 2012 at 16:24|
Good style, great story - I like very much thnx
|Loki - Sunday May 22, 2011 at 05:46|
I second the motion, Stormy I hope you take this up again, and dazzle us once more with your story magic! <3333
|mooney - Sunday May 22, 2011 at 05:32|
I absolutely love this story, please please please update again! I have read this from when you first started writing it and I was heart broken when you stopped updating it... please continue writing it!
P.S. I LOVE the changes, please keep going!
Oh my gosh I was looking for this fic it has a new name and has been rewritten from what I originally read. I still found myself enjoying this quite a bit and was excite with each new chapter I was reading. If you so happen to have this finish somewhere I would love to continue reading it.
|Terri721 - Saturday July 25, 2009 at 21:34|
please update!!! I've loved this story from the very beginning and have been hoping one day you'll come back to it...
|Anonymous - Wednesday December 03, 2008 at 04:35|
Heck I know some people don't like crossovers, but this is a beautifully told story and not just a thrown together thing of somebody's favorite fandom. Well thought out, great characters you can feel with and for, and plenty of great stuff to do with plot, themes and romance and that magical touch, the Lady and the minstrel all part of your writing gift! More please Stormlight!!!
|kitn - Thursday November 06, 2008 at 14:01|
As always another wonderful chapter. I enjoy how you portray all the characters, especially Endy and Usagi they are very true to their original counterparts. Can't wait for the next chapter!!
I liked the chapter on how thngs went between Eny and Sere. I think though they have a lot more challenges ahead especially with trust. Miaka and Hort would definately need to be seperated before they jepordize everything. Maybe create a little more angst. I hope to see more chapters comming in.
|Loki - Wednesday November 05, 2008 at 16:24|
Well, this was another classic piece of writing magic, the sword fighting scenes were brilliantly written.
You asked for feedback about the edit side of things:
I will try and remember some of the litle flaws for you.
You use a lot of adverbs, in particular, the '-ly- ones, sometimes these are okay, but one you repeated constant-ly ^^ was 'softly,' I did notice the second time you used 'Endymion' in the opening paragraph, I suggest replacing the second with 'he'
Also, aesthetically, the 'chapter 9' was annoucned twice. (Careful of tenses in one or two places) ^^
In this sentence:
"Sorry, I couldn't think of any other way to make you stay long enough *to*listen to me. (the 'to' is missing)
In one sentence, you wrote the word, 'linens' shoulddn't this be linen ? ^_^
But that was it, if I missed anything, it would only be slight.
This was an amazing chapter, the characters in tense moments, perfection, dialogue superb and the as always the vivid scens, the humor and the affect first rate, stunning, simply stunning Stormy! <3 *hands you a rose and boes*
|Anonymous - Tuesday October 07, 2008 at 05:23|
Stormlight. This and other fics I have seen posted proves that good quality fanfiction is alive and well. I love this, Foundling is every bit as wonderful as those of the 1990s when SM was in its hay-day.
You have warm and believable characters. Love the portrayals of Serenity, Endymion and the other characters from the Fushigu Yuugi universe, works so beautifully and I am looking forward to more! Thank you for sharing your talent with us! <3
|Loki - Saturday September 20, 2008 at 06:22|
Oh the depth of talent we have on AI always makes me feel so priviliged to be a part of it all.
Stormlight this latest chapter, 8 is superb, and sooooo romantic, and yet, in its passion, it lifts the heart and we feel for the characters in a real way.
I loved how Endy has his - little clash with the elemental being, haha! Poor Endy, but he should have held his tongue, but with the last scene, this is one of the moments that I found so enchanting, Fantastic Stormy! <3
"Oh, Miaka." He stepped forward and pulled her into his arms, hugging her tightly. "You fool. You little fool," he berated, sounding aggrieved. "Now. Why only now do you reveal your heart? Why, when it is too late to do anything about it?" Holding her at arm's length, he shook her slightly, his golden-brown eyes searching her confused face. "What good does it do either of us to acknowledge these feelings now?" His voice rose as he became more agitated. "I am betrothed to a foreign princess. I have given my word; the betrothal cannot be broken without risking a war." He shook her again, his expression a strange mingling of fury and elation. "Miaka, my Miaka, why did you—Why did we wait so long?"
And he kissed her.
Now, what more could you ask of a writer and a story? Hmmm? ^___^
|Loki - Tuesday September 09, 2008 at 02:14|
If you want to know how to write magic, purist story magic, then you only have to read Stormlight's amazing compendium of stories. She is one of the best, and in my book, in the top five writers of SM ever. I say that without hesitation B/C she is a genius and what is the best part, she is a really wonderful person as well.
Foundling for me was when I first read it a great journey into a lavish world of courtly manners, and cute royal children, and the deeper weft of the tale in this re-write is superb to say the least. Stormy, you're amazing.
I felt the tragedy of Serenity's mother, her flight from dark tragedy, like the Lady of Shalotte, the imagery and the mood was powerful and evocative.
The children endearing as always, and a new backstory underpinning the narrative adds more to the telling. I love this and while only finished chapter 1 and the prologue, I am really going to savor this one. Good one Stormy! <3 *billions of crescent wishes and roses*