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Story: Tricking Desire
Posted on Saturday November 05, 2005 at 08:27 by G-Star |  |
Winner: Most Popular Story - November 2005
Season: Alternate Reality Main Characters: Usagi/Serena
Genre: Drama, Romance
Rated: R Status: Incomplete
Can one be so bold as to trick desire? Would you dare try if the person you wanted most was already bound by the covenant of marraige? Or would you give your body to him night after night knowing that it could never lead to anything...? Ever.
...Could you do it?
Number of Chapters: 2 Total Size: 29k Word Count: 5,174
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 |  |  |  |  | lexie_06 - Wednesday December 05, 2007 at 22:24 |  |
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 |  |  |  | wow! steamy! when are you going to add more! im at the edge of my seat. hope to read more soon! |
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 |  |  |  | wooww.. that's all that i can say ahhahahaha i love this story ! >_< cant wait for the next chap! |
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 |  |  |  | *laughs* i like this story, when you have time, update!! ^_^ |
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 |  |  |  | -_- ughhhh....whats taking u so long to update godammit!!!
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!
NOW!!!!!!!!!!
AND BY NOW I MEAN RITE NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
GO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WRITE DAMMIT WRITE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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 |  |  |  | One word Love, WOW
it was amazing, a true artist! Magnifico! |
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 |  |  |  |  | Loki - Monday November 21, 2005 at 04:22 |  |
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WISE: I thought your story thus far extremely good reading: hot with a good narrative style, vocabulary good, though I thought you used a couple of repeat phrases and terms a little too often, but not enough to spoil the power of your fic. I love the characters, they have real power and presence and the scene in the coat room, sheer brilliance. I also found the sultry and erotically charged descriptions in the office hit the mark perfectly. So great characterisation over-all and dialogue effective.
I do have some advice for you re-your proofing, or lack thereof, (sorry) ^_^ In the prologue and first chapter you have a few typos and missing words and one or two other flaws. If you are relying on a spell check I would suggest a close reading and edit through story manager. It is otherwise perfect. But too often people let themselves and their readers down by not cleaning these errors up. Please do this as you have a fantastic gift and it would be a shame if you left these matters unattended.
But over-all, Congrats on a truly engaging story! *hands you a dozen hot-pink roses and bows* L. A Moon Cat is forever WISE, love your story!
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 |  |  |  | o0o0o cant wait for the next update!!! ^^ good job with the story! |
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 |  |  |  |  | bluz - Wednesday November 09, 2005 at 01:23 |  |
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 |  |  |  | Yey, and I’m really happy that you’ve updated
Ouch, I wouldn’t know how it would feel to be kicked in the crotch, but I do know that it would hurt, but since he was already hard, then that just made the pain even worse.
The sex scene was good, it really was, one of the best I’ve read in a good minute.
I was reading ( off course (lol) ) and I was wondering how does he look like, since you never mention it, if you did, then I must of missed it.
Now the question you know that I’ve been dying to know, who.......... is........... she.........
I have to know. I’m inching to know. Lol. What I do know is that she’s very close to Serena, which doesn’t really help. |
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 |  |  |  |  | Anonymous - Tuesday November 08, 2005 at 20:59 |  |
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