Original: Autumn Strangers|
Posted on Tuesday July 01, 2008 at 09:08 by zaizai
Love once lost nearly a decade ago, ignites in the very same place they first met. They were merely children then, he was twenty-two, she was eighteen, and that summer had brought them together for three brief months, revealing to them paradise, but then in Autumn, ripping happiness away. Ten years later they reunite at their meeting place to discover that, though the years had changed them, made them older, wiser, worldlier, it couldn't change the feelings they still had for each other
Number of Chapters: 1 Total Size: 13k Word Count: 2,390
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That was very very sweet.
|Araya - Monday July 21, 2008 at 17:05|
This little piece was so beautiful and enchanting. My heart accelerated along with Diana's and I could feel her anger and hurt as if it were my own. You truly have a way with words ZaiZai and with that you paint this beautiful picture and allow the reader to not only look but feel.
My only qualm with this piece is that there isn't more. I would love to see you continue and entrance us once more!
|heaven85 - Friday July 18, 2008 at 07:02|
This is a really sweet story. I love they way your wrote it and it does seem quite realistic.
|Anonymous - Monday July 07, 2008 at 09:38|
This is so sweet, and you're a lovely writer, please don't keep us waiting too long for the next story you write, I add my pleas to the chorus!
|Anonymous - Saturday July 05, 2008 at 23:45|
I really think you are amazing. If you wrote this as a Darien Serena version, it would soon be#1 of stories, but I think original stories are just as good and better than fics, not that fics aren't cool, but you write something that is all from you, that story from your own imagination and your muse. Thanx and keep it up!!!
|Anonymous - Thursday July 03, 2008 at 22:31|
I agree with Spud and Loki and everyone about your writing, you have a heap of talent and I hope you keep posting more!
|spud - Wednesday July 02, 2008 at 06:18|
Wow, that was so utterly heartrending. In a good way. That was nice.
|Loki - Tuesday July 01, 2008 at 14:55|
WISE: your writing has continued to blossom and you're doing wonderfully. Few flaws and only a sentence here and there, careful of split infinitives, 'to not' but aside from that a little repeat wording: She breathed a heavy sigh. What would it take for her to just forget? She stayed like that for a long time, staring blankly at the shifting water shining so brightly *back* at her. It was a good thirty minutes before she decided to turn *back* and head *back* to the house. Maybe you could reduce the 'backs' ^__^ But there was only thee superficial things to note, I likely missed one or two tiny things but that was it with the grammar and all. Well done!
As for the story itself, simply enchanting.
I loved the characters, you get inside Diana's head and her heart right away, she is endearing and a very real persona, somebody easy to like and to love no doubt and at the apex of your ficlet, a tear or two at the close there for me gave this fic a solid gold star and two people found their way through the years and through 'communication' so much a valuable gift and one some people ought to embrace more in their lives in their friendships and relationships, and here you showed us how and why two people benefited from this simple act of 'reaching out' and saying what was in their hearts and on their minds, a good contemporary message for the reader to think about and I congratulate you girl, as you are a fine writer and I wish you well with all you do! <3 L.
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