After some shocking events Sailor Pluto is forced to send Serena to the GW dimension. dark fic/angst/abuse
Number of Chapters: 23 Total Size: 316k Word Count: 57,071
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|Loki - Friday February 04, 2011 at 17:04|
It is always a good sign when you read a story and don't stop until it is done, or near complete.
Ifound it intriguing, and the twists and turns kept me anchored to the story, you have a real knack for spinning a yarn, I am looking forward to the next chapters.
Something that might help with writing technique, hope you get something out of it, good work!
|Loki - Friday February 04, 2011 at 12:33|
Brutal, cruel, and very reminiscent of a true event; this was powerful, tragic, and though Darien is way OOC here, it is shocking to think him of all people capable of such a thing, though in RL it does happen far too often and in this respect it is an important piece.
I will say, you have a few grammar and structural issues, but a good BETA editor would help on that score, but those points aside, this is an important narrative and very confronting and disturbing; it has to be to raise awareness on this vital issue in the real world.
I am reminded of China Doll, I think it is, or something similar, and writers like Ellourra, vipaka and other writers who have written on this subject, I will keep reading and see where the story takes me, congratulations for writing this as I am sure it will help some people out there as well as for its own sake as a piece of powerful drama and poignant contemporary writing we need to read - well done! <3