Season: Alternate Universe
Posted on Sunday July 28, 2002 at 16:47 by ladysolo
Main Characters: Mamoru/Darien, Usagi/Serena
Genre: Action, Adventure, Drama, Romance
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Number of Chapters: 18 Total Size: 734k Word Count: 129,956
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wonderful story!! I loved it. Few grammar problems that distracted me from the story but other then that totally awesome. Can't wait til you finish part 2!!
|Mayonaka - Tuesday January 16, 2007 at 21:58|
This was the best FBI oriented story I have ever read! And I am not exxagerating one bit!It was that good, but then again, you know that already. Tell me where do you get your inspiration to write such twists and turns and such? Never the less, it was too wonderful!
This story captured my attention from the first line. I was so engrossed in this story when I first read it and I was so mad that I couldnt remember the name. Serena's character in this story was brilliant. I love it when she actually has a brain and is independent. Cant wait to read more of your work!
this story is so good , and its really cool , cause i might end up workin for the fbi myself one day. thank god serena's not the dumb blond she usually portrayed as ... much luv 2 ya !!
|lydials - Monday December 26, 2005 at 02:19|
I am completely in awe of your abilities. You are a fantastic author! "Merletto"'s plot was expertly crafted, and entirely unpredictable. Thank you, thank you, thank you for not taking the most obvious path in every situation!!! Thank you for keeping me wondering what happened next!
My only negative comment would be that there were grammatical errors scattered in the story, but it was the sort of story in which that really didn't matter because I was so involved in the plot! They were easy to overlook!
An amazing job -- thank you for sharing this awesome piece of fiction!
|Lialyn - Sunday November 27, 2005 at 07:52|
That was the most GREATEST story in the entire world!!!!!!!! I honestly can say that this story was the best story that I've ever read out of all the fanfics that I have read. And you can trust me when I said that I have read ALOT of stories. The only thing that I was sad about was when Darien's uncle Michael was killed.
Ladysolo, I have one thing to say........YOU ROCK! I loved it! Can't wait to read the second installment! :)
|Dirinu - Tuesday September 27, 2005 at 23:40|
Fabulous! Wonderful! You should change the names and publish the story!!!
|Serafina - Sunday October 10, 2004 at 23:16|
Expertly done m'dear.
I have to say that it took me two days to read the entire story-only because I had real life to attend to mid-way through... That's how addictive your story was. I sat in fron tof my computer for three hours straight save a bathroom break to read through twelve chapters...
It seemed so OOC when I first started reading, the more I read, the more parallels I noticed between your amazingly well put together story and the actual SM storyline. I choose not to bore anyone with a long winded review so I hope you'll just take my word for it. >wink<
I nearly cringed at some of the cliche statements and professions of love because they were such a contrast to the moments the characters found themselves in but for the story, it works. It gave these characters a humanity at the end of a day of fighting evil. It brought a sense of reality to a story that would otherwise runaway from itself. Bravo for not letting it get too outrageous.
There were some misspellings and some misused words and missing words that would complete sentences (only from the earlier chapters, later on, those are not present), probably just from typing for long hours and the evil spell check button being too stupid to know the difference (i.e. quite, and quiet... >eek
Very good story! Keep doing the good work!
|Rakusa - Wednesday May 05, 2004 at 05:14|
It was good, i was very intregied by how you were going to bring everything down. I wasn't surprised by who the leak was though, nor was i surprised at the family revelation. Also it might have been a bit long, good if it was a book, but for a fanfic, it could have been cut down a bit. But what i believe you carried off the best was all of the emotions and all of the FBI technical mumbo jumbo. I especially liked some of Serena's wit. Over all, very very good.
|Soluna - Thursday March 18, 2004 at 19:58|
omg! i loved this story! ive been reading the whole thing thru for almost 4 hours! im going to start reading the sequel right now! the story was amazing and just incredibly written, i have a feeling ur gonna be a great author one day btu so many people were killed in the end, just as well but i wish the di medici had been killed as well.
|Miiaevia - Friday March 05, 2004 at 04:24|
I LOVED your story! It had such a well thought out plot and I never knew what to expect. The ending was so poignant and moving and fit right in to the story. It was also completely shocking! I loved it keep up the good work!
AHHHHHHHHH!!! I loved this story!!! *grins* But I think it was sad...I think the arguements between Darian and Serena were hilarious! You are a great author, I remember reading the story "Tictacs" over and over again!
i relly liked you should be a writer some day
i relly liked you should be a writer some day
|Megz_88 - Monday September 29, 2003 at 14:56|
I don't think I can even find words to describe how much I love this story, but I'm going to try.
It's absoloutely amazing... that's the first thing that comes to mind. It's one of those stories that I can go back and read over and over again, and that's saying something.
All the twists you put into it kept me guessing right up to the end, and the way you put it together was simply ingenious. The detail in your writing only increases the already extremely high standard and I love the way that it's unique and diferent from all the other fanfics out there.
So thankyou very muchly for such a fantabulous read, and I can't wait for Merletto 2!
GREAT STORY! You are a really talented writer!! I MEAN IT, DO NOT STOP WRITING!! If you ever publish a book, LET ME KNOW!!! :-P
|SlrMagica - Wednesday August 27, 2003 at 11:43|
totally awesome story- i just loved it. the plot was engaging and the characters developed well. i definitely hope you'll continue with the sequel =D
|Anonymous - Sunday August 17, 2003 at 23:10|
to be serious... this should be made into a movie... then i'll watch it!!!
|Tasheen - Saturday July 26, 2003 at 22:39|
I loved this tory I just finished readingi t. It was well written and detailed. It also had some good plot turns so you never really knew just who was good and who was bad the whole way through. It was awesome.
Marvelous. Simply marvelous. This story reads like a modern-detective novel. Gripping and very engaging. I have to admit, I'm also a bit biased on this story since my own story also has Serena as an FBI agent - I guess great minds do think alike. Still, I did Serena as an FBI agent first, so nyah. :P I must admit, though, you did it better. Maybe if I ever do a sequel to Seeing Stars, I'll have to use this story as an example.
Oh, and I wouldn't mind a sequal to Merletto, either, but must the title be Merletto 2? I'm sure you can come up with something more fitting than just adding a number. ^_~
|Violet - Monday March 03, 2003 at 01:35|
oh. my. god. that was one of the GREATEST stories i have ever read. it was very well written and very well put together. i liked the way you put it together, u know, giving hints throughout the entire story, though not knowing they ARE hints until the end of the story when it it gets explained. i loved it, one my newfound favorites! I give you 5 stars!
Great Story!!!!!!!!!!!! I want more, but it's over....right more anyway!!!!! Make a sequel!!! This is a REALLY good story, LS. I want more
*cries* It's over, I finished the story...*pouts*...What have I done?
|Pheosha - Thursday November 21, 2002 at 23:41|
AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! hehe it rocked!! way to go!, you are a very good writer. can't wait to see the sequel. PLEASE post when you are putting it up. Good luck on it. :)
|Anonymous - Tuesday November 05, 2002 at 06:50|
OMG THAT WAS GREAT!!!!!!! I ABSOULUTELY CANT WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!! *SCREAM* OMG! that'll be awesome hope to see it soon!!!!
|Anonymous - Thursday October 31, 2002 at 08:54|
Wow. I'm only on chapter 2, but I can't wait to read the rest! This story really has me hooked. *runs off to read the rest*
|Anonymous - Friday October 18, 2002 at 12:23|
How wonderful can one writer be:)? (notice the question mark)
How anxious can an editor get? (notice the question mark)
I know that I have read this story, thousands of time (I am not exagerating), but each time it gets better and better. I can't wait for the sequel although this will always be my fav...
I recommend this everyone who ever visits this site:) and I will keep bugging the author until the comedy comes out....Which I have been pushing for from the day ladysolo began to write it:).......
SO GET WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
|Stargirl - Wednesday October 09, 2002 at 01:16|
One of the best stories you can hope to read, a rarity in the fanfic world. Lady Solo's writing is wonderful and vivid. The plot will grab you into the world she's created from beginning to end! ^___^
Well, I already reviewed this on FF.N but I felt it wouldn't be complete unless I tell everyone just WHAT I think of your brainchild.
Surprisingly enough, I don't hate it. Too bad the same thing can't be said about the author. ^^ Don't worry, peeps, it's just evil banter between evil people; it's not real.
And hey, if you really want to edit WS for me, I really could use the help. I want to rewrite the beginning because I think my writing style changed from the start to where it is now. Infact, I hate the first few chapters. So I accept your deal, LS, and you'll get first dibs on the new stuff.
|Clover - Friday September 13, 2002 at 02:59|