2013-04-22 11:34 In the name of Glamour & Glitter, Fashion & Fame…- Amy Mebberson http://t.co/icF4yx6qZW @amymebberson

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Oh I loved it! Stories like that really make my day ^^
The repetition of the tic-tac line is very effective, the ending is adorable and the story itself is overall thoroughly enjoyable.
And my birthday is Jan 19 also, which make me like it, if possible, even more =D

I just finished reading your fic and I must say that after reading it, I'm in a nice, languid mood. Maybe it will allow me to drift off into sweet, sugar-coated dreams soon?

Anyway, I really like you repeated the same line over and over. We came to expect it and it established a routine. I LOVE how you sucker-punched us with the line at the end. I saw foreshadowing earlier. Darien couldn't say that he loved Sere, but he sure did love his Tic-Tacs! I love how at the end, you slammed us and let us know that this is exactly what you intended. All this time, there was a double-meaning to the phrase.

As much as I loved this refrain, the sentence structure itself bothered me a little:

~~~~~"...I can't live without them." He said it with such a serious tone, she knew that he was jesting.~~~~~

If you ever go back to edit this, I would put a period or a semi-colon between "tone, she" rather than the comma currently in place. It just really stuck out. I saw a couple of other minor things in the piece, but they were easy to overlook and move on from. It was harder to do so with this because the line is so integral to the piece itself. It got really jarring.

[Same thing at the end when you change the line up a little:
~~~~~He said it with such a serious tone, she didn't know what to make of it. ~~~~~]

I really like the TONE that you used in this piece. I liked the funny moments [For example, Serena joking about mace at the end]. I liked the repetoire that you built between the characters. You built a history--they KNEW each other. The nicknames, the familiar phrases...everything. I really like how you played that aspect of your story. It gave it an extra layer and is part of what made the story truly special.

Finally....because I *AM* a sap.....

I ADORE the last time he made the comment. I LOVE what you did with that moment. I think that's why I'm in such a bubbly mood now. That moment made me melt.


Anyway, I'm sorry that I wrote a really long review. Well, more like a series of nonsensical comments. I like to talk to much. I only write reviews when I have something to say, though. It's meaningless to reply to something with a one-liner if you don't have anything to say. Ahh..it's hard to explain. Anyway..thank you for reading this far. Also, thank you for posting this story for us all to read! ^_^

Wonderful story. I love the tic tacs - such a delicious treat! I liked the use of dates to make things clear (though I kind of had to guess on the sophomore, junior thing - the only one I know for sure it senior is the last one!) And I liked the dialogue - very natural and sweet. Thank you!

That was an incredibly sweet story, although too brief! You have wonderful talent! More writing and more romance please? I'd like another helping!

I loooooooooooved it! I just love Serena and Darien love stories. You are truly gifted. Keep up the good work. :)

That's so cute.

It's so cute...

Loved the story. Very original plot girl. Keep it up.

Wow. I haven't been this excited while reading a fic in forever. It was the sweetest thing... I won't say that I've ever read, I've read some pretty mushy stuff, but it's up there with the "OH MY GOD I WANT TO GET MARRIED NOW!" stories. I was a bit confused as to how Greg could have known Serena since she was in the sixth grade, as she moved there her freshman year, but I loved that the teachers were in on it. I also enjoyed them being the same age, (Darien a little younger?) I felt as though they held a closer bond that way.

Though I am not one of the three who get the inside joke, I love the tictac line in every insertment. I can guess that what he meant was "I love you Serena, I can't live without you." and she didn't believe it for years, and when she finally did, the line changed. I love patterns like that, they really add to the story.

Great job overall, really. I suppose I should listen to the masses and take the time to read more of your stories! Haha but not before I finish Daisy Miller and this God forsaken AP lit essay.

OH, PS, if you ever edit this, for some strange reason the first letter of a few of the shorter words were cut off. Like 'face' and 'be'. I don't know if this was because of a typo or loading problems, just thought I'd mention it.

~Claidi

This story is just adoreabley cute. I just love the symbolisom and characters... *sighs dreamily* Ah, sweet love...

I absolutely looooooooooooooooooooooooooooved this story!!! Keep writing, you're style is wonderful!

This story is very sweet. I loved it!!!!

BEAUTIFUL!! subtle, ummm...gosh! i can't describe it but i noe i loved it!!!

Yay! Usagi and Mamoru forever!

*cough* Anyway, I loved your story! I love stories in that aspect, but because you have such an excellent talent to writing your story becomes even more enjoyable. There is nothing like bad writing to ruin a good plot.

I especially enjoyed the entire tic-tac view that it was based on. Every time he said it it sounded just so sweet and made the story --and the ending-- that much better. Thank you for a great read.

its so sweeeeeeet!!!! i love this story! its so amazing and cute and sweet!!

I realized that I've never written a review for this story! So I think I'll do it today. You have no idea how much I enjoy your stories. This was the first story that I had read from you and I thought it was so creative. Tic-tacs!! All I got to say is I really think your an amazing writer and absolutly brilliant. Thanks for for the stories.

its was so sweet!

Your story is inspiring! It's one of those stories that simply makes your heart melts. Thank you for writing it. I admire your works. =)

This is a great story! I was crying for happiness....it's is so sweet almost like a fairytale...::sighs::

Oh, I love the story, it's sweet.

This story came at a perfect time! Right when i need a WAFF fic! Good job LS!

i see how it is!! your on this and not aim so you can avoid me??? jk!! get your aim up and running so i can talk to you. this is crazy, but i've been sitting here reading these stories just about every nite. What's happening to me?? haha. ttyl
musiknutt3

awesome story ladysolo from the tower of terror. sorry about all the crap i gave you earlier!! you know it was me (with no alcohol in my bloodstream) can't wait for biglots tomorrow!! so why are you taking a poetry class and not the short story class?? Good one!! ttyl.
MusikNutt3

Great Story I wish Darien was not an animation and attended College with PVE.. now you know who is writing ... Tic-Tacs is one of your best short stories, and I know there will be so many more in the future... especially a comedy.:)

I've like read this story 5 times and I love it! 10 awards go to one of the best authors! *bows and does a magic trick. boom! out of the hat comes an award for ladysolo!* enjoy it and keep writing!

That was just so sweet! I loved it.

Aww, that was so cute*
Keep up the great work!

WOW, that was so nice. Kawaii!!

Keep up the good work

*eyes widen*
That was so kawaii!!!!!!!! *sigh* ill never look at tic-tacs the same again *giggles*
You truly are a great writer! I hope you write more of anything soon coz ur sooooo talented i just know itll be great ^_~ Keep up the great work!
~Tsuki1~

I LOVE this story! I think I reviewed it on ff.net, too, but I just had to tell you again how fantastic I think this story is. ^_^

What a wonderous story, as an Editor myself, I was just wondering who looked over this glorious story for you, I hope it was P..V..E.. Well, you have some serious skills, I can't wait till you hit the book shelves, make sure that you inform everyone when your first book comes out I would like a copy:)

What a great story, I can't believe that someone could actually think of such an involved plot. Did this happen to you during your school years? If so the guy that impacted your views must be one heck of a hunk, and a sweetie. Jaina, I have to write some more reviews so I'll comment later.

LMHS

That was beautiful! So sweet. But, probably like many others, I wish I knew the inside joke. Ne-how, that was a great story and you are a wonderful writer!