2013-04-22 11:34 In the name of Glamour & Glitter, Fashion & Fame…- Amy Mebberson http://t.co/icF4yx6qZW @amymebberson

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Ahh, cliffhanger! Over the course of the last five days, I've read this all the way through and despite a few grammatical errors, I really enjoyed it. I'll be looking out for the next update!

Great job. Can't wait to find out more.

Oh I've hungered, wished and wanted to be in Sarah's shoes, but, what a twist! hahaha!

I was thrown into the story like I'd not left it since your last update. I must say it remans for me one of the most enchanting and fascinating stories I've read on AI and I've read plenty of good ones!

I cannot wait for more. Like you I will get back to my writing after a long break, so here's to plenty more from ou hon, thank you for the magic!!! XXX

I love it! I can't wait to find out what happens next, I hope you update soon.

I just finished the first chapter, and I loved it! The banter between Sarah and Molly was really fun to read, and the story has me excited to find out what happens next, especially with the intriguing ending.

I'm really enthralled by what you have written so far. The plot is exciting and relatable but with just the right amount of fantasy added. I love your characterisation of Sarah and Darren and most especially Molly, she's fabulous. I have lots of questions so I hope that you are back for good now so that I can get some of them answered. Great story. Welcome back!

So good to see you back girl! I enjoyed this chapter, and what a cliffhanger, I see a little trouble ahead, but like every storm, we hope for that silver lining...

Well after LLL, I'm definately looking forward to another one of your stories! I don't remember the original JAO, so I'm looking at this with pretty fresh eyes - and loving it!

As for the technical stuff, I saw some minor punctuation stuff and some usage problems. For example, you used the word 'bored' to mean the thing that professors write on.:)

Okay, having said that, I want to say that this story is great so far! I like the strong characterization of Sarah. You cleverly give us insight into her personality through dialogue and emotions rather than narrative on her history. As for Darren, he's still a mystery to me, but that's okay if you are planning to tell the story from Sarah's point of view. Since you switch to Haruka and Michiru's point of view and to third person, it seems like Darren is the only person who is a mystery in the story. Again, not a flaw per say, just an observation.

Anyway, I think you've given good background and established personalities well in chapters 1 & 2. I'm looking forward to having the rest of the gang enter the story and the plot to build. I have high expectations from a talented author like yourselves - just a warning!

Ooooo I love it! Sarah and Darren's personalities are great! I can't wait to see what happens and see exactly what you have in store for Sarah. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more!

Love it!!! can't wait to read the rest...

Okay, I have read quite a few stories, and each one has something special going for it, and very few I leave unread once started.

WISE: This one is such a treasure. I will get the constructive points out the way first. I noticed a few problems with punctuation, x (!? or ?!) These drag down any good story -- and believe me, your story is great! I detected minor flaws, some expression and grammar, but over-all these were only occasional. But on a scale of 1 to 10 I gave this a 9. The structural issues are easly fixed via story manager.

Plot: Brilliantly conceived -- the idea of placing the mistress of Sailor Moon indirectoly into the narrative a stroke of genius. Your characterisation is excellent. The Silver Millennium descriptions incredibly good. Endymion to Serenity and the cats, Luna a beautiful job there. The dream concept woven throughout the narrative a great storytelling device and you use it well. Rick and Darren I thought amazing. The re-working of the meeting between Sara and Darren so funny. Dialogue contemporary and works great. I loved the descriptions of campus life, Sara has punch and a heart, angst content great, and the affect over-all I can tell is superb and I suspect shall continue. The coffee shop with Rick and the scene at the chapters end was cleverly done. This is a Sailor Moon fan fic lovers fic! LOL By that I mean, it is well thought out, entertaining and hooks the reader and does and says all the right things and has a powerful undercurrent that I sense is the conviction and passion in your ability to create for us a fantastic story. The intrigue you introduce at chapters end, compelling.

In short, I think this one a potential classic in the making. Just polish the technical points. Your visualisation, vocabulary, voice and world building skills and humor come to the fore and I hope this story continues to its conclusion. I love it CW, and I will recommend and put it in my faves! Salutations on a job well done thus far.

*hands you a bunch of pink and red roses and bows* L A Moon Cat is forever WISE, love this story!

Well, I'm thrilled to see that you're still writing; I was afraid that going to college might put an end to it. This story looks like it has a lot of promise - the two subplots that will eventually cross (I presume). I like the way you've portrayed Sarah - her character really comes alive when you explained about her mother, her major as well as with her dialog with Molly. I'm looking forward to the updates. I've really liked your writing in the past, as well as Aria and Alicia Blade; if they are editing the story, you three are going to be a fanfic dream team!

Man, I just wrote a review to Alica Blade suggesting she read this story because her story reminded me of yours, and now I see that she’s already reviewed your story. Guess I was a little late.

Anyway, for the real review: I love this! The relationship between Sarah and Darren is classic to the show but also refreshingly original. There’s not much else I can think of say other than to tell you that you are doing a great job and you BETTER update or else… *cracks knuckles* Just kidding.

Hahahaha! Oh, well, of *course* I had to come read this after you mentioned it. And I have NOT been disappointed. If The Prof can possibly re-inspire your muse for this, it will be worth it! It's fresh, upbeat, and complex without being tiring. I LOVE Sarah and Darren's personalities, especially toward each other, and can't wait to see what happens to her in the Silver Millenium. I hope you'll continue!

WOW...I find this very entertaining...its one of the few stories that has a different outlook on SM's life...this is a very good one...keep up the good work!!

Whoa Claidi...complicated. This is a really interesting approach to SM, there's like 3 different realities competing here. And *I* love all the references to actual fics and authors, makes it all the more real.
umm...I am a bit confused though, but I'm assuming my confusion will be cleared up in the later chapters...so update soon!!!

Yay! I'm first! Anyways, I love it so far it's really cute anf funny so far, keep up the good work and start posting more chapters before I come & strangle you